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Offline Ollie Rankin

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Lyrics 2011/12/30
« on: December 30, 2011, 07:17:39 PM »
The rich get richer and the poor get screwed
While bankers bring home billions, teachers barely bring home food
The middle class shrinks; their investments run dry
And I for one am wondering why
While the rich get richer the poor don't rise up
We just keep on working to line the pockets of the corrupt
We just keep believing one day we might be rich, too
But it's never gonna happen to someone honest like me or you

The system is broken, let's all gather in the open
Link arms people and occupy
We all know the truth; we've all seen the truth
Speak up people let me hear you cry:

We are the 99 percent
We know where all the money went
We are the 99 percent
And we're coming for every singe cent

The Arab Spring has inspired me
But it's not just the oppressed that deserve to be free
And it's not just the middle east where they stifle free speech
And where police use violence against peaceful protest
Exactly the same tactics in UC Berkley as in Damascus
Mace in the face and a nightstick to the head
The protestors message is effectively suppressed
But it reminds the population of the price of dissent
See how they closed down all the occupy camps
The way they treat Bradley Manning and Julian Assange
Why do you think they're so afraid of wiki leaks?
They must have even deeper darker secrets to keep
We're not victims of a totalitarian regime
We're just cogs in a giant money making machine
That is built and run exclusively for the benefit
Of a small gang of rich white men we call the one percent

We are the 99 percent
We know where all the money went
We are the 99 percent
And we're coming for every singe cent

We are the 99 percent
We know where all the money went
We are the 99 percent
And we're coming for every singe cent

There are crooked politicians in the pockets of the banks
Pushing through new legislation just by way of saying thanks
For the votes that were bought with the money that was made
By the bankers themselves when the laws got changed

Far too few people control far too much media
We need more public access and more Wikipedia
We need to stop buying so much of our news
From those with a vested interest in shaping our views

The system is broken, let's all gather in the open
Link arms people and occupy
We all know the truth; we've all seen the truth
Speak up people let me hear you cry:

We are the 99 percent
We know where all the money went
We are the 99 percent
And we're coming for every cent

We are the 99 percent
We know where all the money went
We are the 99 percent
And we're coming for every cent

Offline Ollie Rankin

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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #1 on: January 01, 2012, 05:23:43 PM »
I'm thinking of changing the first verse like so:

The rich get richer and the rest of us get screwed<-- We don't all admit to being poor and I want it to be inclusive
While bankers bring home billions, millions barely bring home food
The middle class shrinks; our investments run dry <-- not in love with this line, but again, going for inclusiveness
And I, for one, am wondering why
While the rich get richer the rest of us don't rise up <-- doesn't flow as well in this line, tho I like the alliteration
We just keep on working to line the pockets of the corrupt
We just keep believing one day we might be rich, too
But it's never gonna happen to someone honest like me or you

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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #2 on: January 02, 2012, 10:35:39 AM »

Exactly the same tactics in UC Berkley as in Damascus
Mace in the face and a nightstick to the head

Might roll better:

Exactly the same tactics in Berkeley and Damascus
Mace in the face and SWAT boots in our asses

Edit:

Much the same tactics in Davis and Damascus


« Last Edit: January 02, 2012, 11:02:07 AM by Jay Reynolds »

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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #3 on: January 02, 2012, 11:19:25 AM »

We just keep on working to line the pockets of the corrupt   
We just keep believing one day we might be rich, too   
But it's never gonna happen to someone honest like me or you

Lots of syllables.  Difficult.

What about this sort of thing:

So, keep working hand to mouth for the corrupt
And keep on thinking that you'll be rich, too
Yeah, it's never gonna happen for a sucker like you




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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #4 on: January 02, 2012, 11:25:24 AM »
We're not victims of a totalitarian regime
We're just cogs in a giant money making machine

I really like how these lines flow.

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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #5 on: January 02, 2012, 03:55:21 PM »
Thanks Jay, some good suggestions in there. Have you ever tried recording yourself rapping? I can't quite read how you intend for some of these lines to flow and I'd been keen to hear what it is you're hearing in your head when you read/write them.

The one thing I keep find myself going back and re-writing lines for is trying to ensure the song's voice belongs to the 99%, rather than being an outside observer. We've all, to a greater or lesser extent, been that sucker that believed if he worked hard enough for long enough he'd somehow make it.

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Re: Lyrics 2011/12/30
« Reply #6 on: January 02, 2012, 06:49:26 PM »
Thanks Jay, some good suggestions in there. Have you ever tried recording yourself rapping? I can't quite read how you intend for some of these lines to flow and I'd been keen to hear what it is you're hearing in your head when you read/write them.

The one thing I keep find myself going back and re-writing lines for is trying to ensure the song's voice belongs to the 99%, rather than being an outside observer. We've all, to a greater or lesser extent, been that sucker that believed if he worked hard enough for long enough he'd somehow make it.

I see your point, yah.

I don't rap (can barely enunciate on a good day) but I can tap out a rhythm.